Added on: November 16, 2017

All Night Long
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November 16, 2017
Lightfoot
In retrospect, I could have handled the transition of Lucy's clothes between the last two panels here better. She should have either started changing in one of the other panels.

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November 16, 2017
KAM
KAM
Typos in panel 5. "Intimidate" and "intimidation" are the spellings you want.

If you type your script up in a writing program with a spell checker it helps lower typos, (not that I recall seeing many by you.)
November 16, 2017
Also, shouldn't her line be "And intimidation failed?" not "And intimitation falled?"
November 17, 2017
Lightfoot
@Chakat_Blackspots

Three typos in one panel. That's probably a record.
November 17, 2017
Lightfoot
@KAM

Thanks, it's fixed now I think. When you are in a hurry, sometimes it's okay, and sometimes you make mistakes.

I usually don't work from a script, I start with a paragraph or two plan. Then I sort of letter the pages to have a sense of pacing and space, because I think I'm a more visual person maybe. Although the program does have a spellchecker-- If I remember to run it.

Spellchecking and typo-checking is kind of that pops up whenever you get just a little careless.
November 16, 2017
snuffysam
Would giving Arim a limiter switch on her strength be practical?
November 17, 2017
Lightfoot
It depends on what she thinks is her unfair advantage. Is it that she's stronger than the others (which was probably true, at least for the people she's likely to fight with, she and Mira are only C-Class heroes), or that she's more durable (because her body is disposable, unlike everyone else).